More fun with WWAY news

I really haven't been that critical of technical performance in the writing of regular people on blogs and forums, but because I've been such a stickler on facts and so forth, I got the Comma Doctor name I so enjoy. And I figured I need to live up to it a little bit.

I linked to this bio of news director Jack Pagano at WWAY in an earlier post about the stellar new anchor team he's put in place. Normally, I try to give a little quarter to the occasional typo, etc., but not when the guilty party is a news director, especially one in the process of pumping himself up so large. So here are my edits and comments - comments in [brackets] and edits in boldface or strikethrough.

Two things, to be clear: I have no connection to WWAY or Mr. Pagano, have never had any contact with him whatsoever. And these are only CORRECTIONS of what is actually WRONG with this bio - not even gonna try to critique the content and presentation beyond one or two minor moves of text.

Jack Pagano, WWAY-TV3 News Director

Jack comes to Wilmington after spending the past two and a half years in Iraq and Washington D.C., Jack worked as a government contractor, Ssenior Sstrategist/Eexecutive Pproducer (Gov’t Contractor)--
developing and producing high level information operations products in the Middle East.
He also trained Iraqi’s Iraqis [plurals don't need an apostrophe] in the art of producing television in a challenging and agile [don't think environments do a lot of jumping around - and not really sure what would be the correct word choice as I can't even discern what concept he intends to convey] environment. One of his highlights in Iraq--directing and producing, [delete comma here] “Baghdad My Love” [add comma here] a compelling and behavioral [what the hell does that mean?] music video that’s motivating and inspiring Middle East audiences.[to do what? kill more Americans?]

Jack has more than 28 years of civilian and military and documentary broadcasting experience. He has produced high level video work for Fformer Secretary of State GENen. Colin Powell,[delete comma here] and Oliver North,[add comma here] and for President’s [plurals still don't need an apostrophe] Bush and Clinton. Jack is a retired Army Llieutenant Ccolonel with extensive hands-on overseas experience, called back to active duty experience in: [absolutely no need for a colon here] Operation Desert Storm, Bosnia, Kosovo and Operation Iraqi Freedom.

Jack’s commercial broadcasting experience includes stints as a Pentagon Ccorrespondent and Pproducer for FOX News, Eexecutive Pproducer at KDFW in Dallas, Texas, and Ppreproduction Pproducer/Ssupervisor at WSVN in Miami, Florida.

In 2005, Jack was a coordinating producer and videographer for Nick Lachey and Jessica Simpson's 2-hour ABC TV special, "TOUR OF DUTY," that aired around the world in 2005. During that special[add comma here] Jack Pagano he shot and edited a music video that aired worldwide. The ABC primetime show aired May 23 and July 4, 2005 around the globe.

Pagano's began his broadcasting career began as an page at NBC Page in New York. He holds a B.A. degree in Communication from Seton Hall University.

He continues to seek out work that will inspire, educate, and empower audiences everywhere. Pagano is an award-winning producer,[delete comma here] who creates impassioned productions.

Jack’s vision and goal at WWAY-TV3:
Develop and produce stories and newscasts that educate, inform, motivate, empower, entertain and inspire. It’s all about "people" and the way they live and work in Wilmington. Make a difference every[add space here]day...